Model Answer:
The provided graph depicts the changes in crime rates in Newport's inner city over a span of nine years, from 2003 to 2012. The data shows that burglary incidents experienced the most significant shift, while theft cases remained relatively constant and low.
Initially, in 2003, burglary was the most prevalent crime, with nearly 3,400 reported cases. This number increased to about 3,700 in 2004 but then steadily decreased until it reached just over 1,000 incidents in 2008. There was a slight increase in 2009, and the trend continued to fluctuate for the rest of the period.
Similarly, car thefts followed a comparable trend to burglary, starting from around 2,800 cases in 2003 and decreasing until 2006. The number then rose to roughly 2,200 in 2007, followed by a minor decrease in the following year. However, from 2008, car thefts had a general upward trend until the end of the period.
On the other hand, robbery has always been a less significant issue for Newport, with the number of offences remaining relatively stable over the nine years. Notably, there were approximately 700 incidents reported in both 2003 and 2012.
- Paraphrasing: The introduction successfully rewords the prompt ("changes that took place" → "depicts the changes").
- Trend Vocabulary: Uses precise verbs and nouns like "significant shift," "steadily decreased," "fluctuate," and "upward trend."
- Comparisons: Connects data points effectively using "Similarly," "On the other hand," and "comparable trend."